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Writing 1 

Name: Max Uribe

First. One year ago. I got a part time job. Everyday I went to work early, and un the afternoons I studied. I received a salary every week. Then I kept It in a pocket. Two months later. I had saved a lot of money so, I decides to open a bank account. Next I couldn't work anymore because I didn't have time. After that I had to buy many things for univeristy so, I had to withdraw money. Everyday I removed $50 per day. By the end of the first year. I didn't have any money left on my credit card. Later I was in debt because I didn't have money to deposit. Finally I had to close my account. 

If you openned and account, you needed a permanent job. 

w1 Jennifer Rojas

My new dog 
I always wanted a dog. I will never forget the time when I bought a dog. It was the happiest day of my life because I played with my dog all the afternoon...and then everything went wrong.
Frist of all she started to cry. I tried to calm her down and I fed her. The next morning, I woke up and I saw that all my things were messy. I felt stressed because that day I had many things to do. Later when I wanted to listen to music on my cellphone, I started looking for my headphones but I couldn't find them. Suddenly I realized that my dog had it and she was biting my headphones . Until now she has spolied7 of them.
Two months later my dog got sick. I went to the vet and I spent a lot of money on her medicine. Then, she was urinating everywhere in my house, this was too stressful!
By the end of the first year, a new dog came to my neighborhood. This dog was very egresive and wanted to hit my dog. I didn't know what to do about it. Finally, my dog can now have puppies and that is a big problem because all the dogs chase us when I take her out for a walk. I know it sounds difficult but it's the best thing that could happen to me.

W1: Jennifer Rojas

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Gaspar Vila Angel -writing1 -correction

One of the biggest mistakes I've ever made was buying a dog. I always wanted a dog and thought that having one would be funny. I still remember the day I bought my dog. That day, I was excited....but then everything went wrong.

First of all, I lived in a small house. My house only had four rooms and didn't have free space. When I bought the dog, I didn't know where it would sleep but then I solved the problem.

Next, the other problem was that I studied in the university all the day and the dog stayed in my house all the day, every day of the week. My mother told me:"your dog cries a lot " I thought to make it walk in the park, but I didn't have time.

The next problem was the dog that I bought ate a lot, and I thought that this was a big problem because I didn't have much money to buy his dog food .

My advice about buy a pet is: " Before you have a pet, think twice " 

W1: Yoel Espinoza

Something that I bought and I thought that would be great, was a dog, because I thought that it would be easy to take care of one.

First of all, I bought a dog without thinking about the things that a dog needed. One day, I just saw that dog and I fell in love. Then, I carried him to my house and the dog was really shy. Also he was crying too much. I think that it was because he was a baby and needed his mom. Next, in order to calm the dog, I fed him and he slept for some hours. Later, he woke up and started crying again. It was too noisy. One month later, he grew up and needed a big place to play and enjoy, but I did not have space in my house. Next month, he died, because the dog needed some medication but I could not give those to him.

If you want to buy a pet, you need to have a lot of time to take care of it and money to buy its special food and some medication that the animals need.

WRITING N° 1 - Victoria Mendoza.

When I was a child I wished a barbie but a barbie with a real hair. I still remember the day that I bought my barbie with real hair.

First, I went to the mall and searched where was the barbie. Then, I found the barbie with real hair and I bought her. Two hours later I arrived to my house. The next day, I washed her hair with my shampoo and the hair got sponge.

One month later, when eating my breakfast I put my barbie so close to the kitchen, the barbie took the fire and her hair started to burn in only a few seconds at that moment I discovered that her hair was false and it was a synthetic hair.

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Writing 1 - Lorena Franshesca Huamani del Pozo

First of all, I got tickets for the airplane. I was so scared, because I'd never traveled by airplane, and also the people always said that Mexico is dangerous. Later when I stayed and knew that city and the people who live there. I saw that not the whole city is dangerous, just some places, especially at night. One of the most dangerous places there is "Garibaldi". Finally. I could understand that I can't judge without knowing.

So what's the moral of the history?

" you don't have to judge without knowing.

W 1 - Mayra Clemente

one of the biggest mistakes I've ever made was buy a little dog. I always wanted have a pet and thought that having one would make my life less boring and happier because I would share a bit of my time whit my pet. I still remember the day I bought my little dog that called peluchin, because that day was wonderful

 I went to pets store in the morning search of a dog, that was very easy choose to peluchin because it was a playful and an affectionate puppy so, I loved it immediately. That day was happiest of my life but, then everything became very hard. First of all, I started studying at the university and I didn't have time to care of my puppy as, a small dog requires constant cares so, when I arrived to my house at the night I found all my thing like books very messy, so my mother told me that If you don't know as care a puppy you should give it away someone and I just heard the advice from my mother because I knew that her was right but, I believed that change quickly.

Later, I did know the consequence because peluchin was very depressed and it could not stand being isolated inside of the home because it was a puppy and needed to go out and play all this told us the vet. By in the end I decided give it away it to my neighbour because him had children with them peluchin could play and have a happy life.

So what's the moral of the story? If you don't have time for care someone or share your time you don't should complicate your life and do it do, because you can hurt someone feelings.

Correction Writing N°1 luis alberto piedrihita

One of the biggest mistakes I've ever made was buying a fish.I always wanted a fish but one day i asked my father tu buy a fish then the next day my father gave me the money.He didn't go along with me because he didn't like the animals.Before i buy a fish he told me if the fish die i would eat it.
In that time i felt confused. Finally i decided to keep the money and buy it when i return to huancayo because i was in lima.
In the end i bought the fish but  the next year the fish died because the water wasn't appropriate.

Writing 1 Ricardo Artica Palomino

First of all, when I was a kid. I was in a "piscigranja" with my parents. Then, my father was buying some fishes to cook in my house. I was watching the fishes and later I told my father if I can buy a fish like a pet.

Next, my father bought the fish and I was so happy. When I was a kid, I thought that the fish only needed water and food to live. Finally, I arrived at home with my new pet. Sadly, the poo fish died.

This day I learned that to have a fish you need a machine that produces oxigen in the water and well, it is expensive.